[Tlhingan-hol] mIl'oD veDDIr SuvwI': 'ay' cha' - 12. bIHeghvIpchugh, bIHeghpu'

[Robyn Stewart]

On 2012-08-21, at 5:51, Rohan Fenwick - QeS 'utlh <qeslagh at hotmail.com> wrote:

> The slaves were sent out for a whole year looking for the warrior in the sabre bear pelt, and failed; so they have returned to tell roStevan.

luSambe'pu'mo' nImya' ghaH 'e' HarlaH 'ej leSlaH. maj. 

> Warnings: None. From here out I'll provide warnings only when they're needed

I found that providing them when they weren't needed helped me not forget them when they were. 

> (the whole story's probably only really PG

Aw don't say that. I'm still holding out for the scene where 'avtanDIl and tIna'tIn make out in passionate detail, possibly on horseback. 

> to Qov's MA).

I don't know the Austraiian rating system, but the American one would probably give me an R for qImyal's impalement, and then an even harsher one for the Mahoun/'eSSIm sex scenes. Heck, it would probably get a more restrictive rating for Hota'ro walking around without a shirt than for Hota'ro' getting stabbed through the torso. I suppose it depends on camera angles. 

And I think I had better give a content warning for this commentary. Anyone sharing the sexual squeamishness of American censors, may wish to slap me.  Also, sorry QeS. But I am having a lot of fun. 

> 12. bIHeghvIpchugh, bIHeghpu'
> 
> jatlh toy'wI'pu': «'o 'utlh, puHmeyDaq malengpu', 'ach loDvetlh Qup wISamlaHbe'pu', vaj mabelchoHbe'pu'. yIntaHbogh vay' 'ej leghpu'bogh wIqIHbe'pu'; vaj latlh nab yI'oghneS, pItoy'laHbe'pu'mo' maH.»

nab luta'pu'. toy'pu'. 

> jang 'utlh: «muvItba'ta' puqbe'wI' mob,»

I know you're going for 'only daughter' but it could be interpreted as 'lonely daughter'. How about wa'DIch QavDIch je. 

> jatlh. «mIghbogh 'ej 'upbogh qa''e' vIleghpu' jIH; jaghwI' DameH ghaH mughoSpu'; mungeHba'pu' QI'tu'. tagha', pay' qechmeywIj 'It lughImlu', vaj DaH vISaHbe'choHlaH!»

maj. nab lIjbe'pu'. 

> jatlhDI', lop qaSqa'moHlu'

lopno'! majQa'!

> 'ej ghurmoHtaH bel. Datvo' voDleH[1] quS'a' pa'Daq bom muchwI', qul mI'wI' lurItlu'; nobmey law' lunoblu'. not nobqangwI' nIv boghmoHta' QI'tu'!

chay' mIpvam boSpu' voDleH? rup 'ej nobqa'taH. 

> qaStaHvIS wanI', pa'DajDaq ba'taH 'avtanDIl, yIvbeHDaj neH tuQtaHvIS.

jIHaghqu'! pa'Daq ba'taHvIS loD, yopwaH tuQbe'taHvIS nuq ta'taH? nejtaHvIS voDleH toy'wI'pu', pIj tIna'tIn leghpu' 'ach wej tlhob 'e' ngIl. What's Klingon for 'box of Kleenex and bottle of lotion'?

> bomtaH ghaH, loptaH, HurDagh yachtaH.

Dejchu' Qov HaghtaHvIS. So that's what they call it in the Empire. Poor 'avtanDIl. 

> tugh pa'Daj ghoS tIna'tIn

lojmIt Damup 'e' yIlIjQo', be'! pay' 'avtanDIl HurDagh Dalegh DaneHbe'. 
(Apparently your explicit non warning hasn't stunted my imagination any).

> ... toy'wI''a',

Do'. 

> 'ej jatlh ghaH: «DurIt voDleHwI', lav 'IH rurbogh porgh ghajwI', naghboch pup rurbogh qab ghajwI'.»

DuneH, 'avtanDIl!

> QInvam Dun QoyDI' 'avtanDIl, belqu'choH.

'ej rIn Qu'Daj. 

> QamchoH ghaH; nIvbogh wepDaj 'ej nguvqu'bogh tuQ'eghmoH

yopwaH yIlIjQo', 'avtanDIl. 

> . tagha' jul'a'Daj qIHmo' belqu'choH je; 

qaSpu' DIS 'ej wej qIHqu'pu'? loD vIvup. 

> not nIteb tay'pu' 'avtanDIl tIna'tIn je.
> 'IHwI' bejlaHchugh 'ej bangDajDaq SumlaHchugh, belchoHbej vay'. HemtaHvIS 'ej jaqtaHvIS,

Do' DaH jeqbe'taHvIS. 

> tIna'tIn jaH 'avtanDIl'e';

voDleH Such. potlh wanI'. 

> paghmo' tuH ghaH.

yopwaH tuQbe'taH'a'?

> be'vamvaD pIj SaQpu', pIj 'IQpu', pIj 'Itpu'; DaH, tagha' leghlaH.

yIjottaH 'avtanDIl. 'eblIj yInatlhQo'. 

> ba'taHvIS nIvwI' ghajbe'bogh be'vetlh'e', 'IQlaw'. wov, 'ej chal 'ul rur; 

chal 'ul rur. Qob'a'?

> tlhoS maS luSo' tIHHeyDaj. porghDaj lang

Daj. langwI' maS 'avtanDIl. be' Ha'DIbaH yap vImaS jIH. 

> vel nItbogh veDDIr nIv; volchaHDajvo' HuS waghqu'law'bogh ngup tIS. 'ach 'IHmoHmeH 'ut neH qIjbogh 'ej tIq charghbogh Huy'Du'Daj'e',

"Doj nguplIj tIna'tIn. ravwIjDaq nIvlaw'."

> tIqbogh 'ej mongDaj Dechbogh jIbDaj'e' je.

'avtanDIl vIvup. 'oy'ba' tIqDaj. 

> Qublaw'taH 'ej tamtaH ghaH, ba'taHvIS 'ej choljaH Doq tuQtaHvIS. 'avtanDIl van ghaH, ghIq QamchoH 'ej pe'vIlHa' 'avtanDIl ba'choHmoH.

tlhoS jorbeH 'avtanDIl tIq. 

> nguqHa' 'ej vuvtaH 'avtanDIl, ba'DI'. bejchuq qabchaj; belchoHchu' 'avtanDIl, bangna'Daj bejtaHvIS.
> jatlh loD: «'o muSeHchu'bogh be''a', chay' qajatlhlaH? jul ghomchugh maS'e', natlhlu'pu' 'ej ngabqu'law'.

I'm not quite following how the sun overwhelming the moon is a specific complement to tIna'tIn, when 'avtanDIl says it, unless it's just universally understood that she is the sun. 

> DaH jIHvo' mu'mey natlhlu'pu' 'ej ngabchoHlaw' yabwIj'e'. vaj Du'IQmoHpu'bogh wanI', DuQuchqa'moHlaHbogh mIw je HIjatlh.»

'IQ'a'? 'IQ tIna'tIn wej net Del. 

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> [1] Henceforth I'm using voDleH instead of joH'a'. 'Cause I can. The petty lords will remain as jawpu'

maj. 

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> SKI: roStevan decides the warrior in the sabre bear pelt was just an evil spirit, and so calls for the celebrations to start anew. But tIna'tIn isn't so sure and summons 'avtanDIl to her to help ease her heart's continuing pain.

Careful. Your summary just gave out info that the reader doesn't have. I wanted to spend the day imagining that she had summoned him for a quickie in the throne room.  

I'm off to google Rustaveli slash fiction now. I'll try to be better behaved with respect to the next 'ay'. 
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