[Tlhingan-hol] Klingon Word of the Day: DIvI'

[SuStel]

On 3/15/2016 12:51 PM, mayql qunenoS wrote:
> targh DIjeymeH DIvI' HoS wIchenmoHnIS, jatlh vIghro' Sa'.
> in order to defeat the dogs, we need to create a strong federation,
> said the general of the cats.

wIchennISmoH

> peDoghQo' ! jatlh targh Sa' ; noH ghuHmeH DIvI'vetlh luchenmoHpu' vIghro'.
> don't be silly ! said the dog general ; the cats created that
> federation in order to prepare for war.

{ghuH} "prepare for, be alerted to" means you're not taken by surprise, 
not that you're making preparations. Try using {ghobrup}.

Also, instead of {noH}, you probably want to use the word {veS}. {noH} 
refers to a particular war, while {veS} refers to warfare.

> DIvI'chaj Degh yIlegh ! targhvaD jatlhpu' vIghro' la'. reH lIghIjchoH Deghvam !
> look at our federation insiginia ! said the cat commander for the
> dogs. this symbol will make scared you forever !

What the cat commander says should be his own words, not your 
third-person reiteration. {DIvI'maj Degh yIlegh}.

I would leave off the {-choH}. It's not forever starting to scare them, 
and the idea of starting isn't really important here (according to your 
English translation). Just say {reH lIghIjchoH Deghvam}.

You might even consider adding a {-jaj} to the sentence, though it's not 
essential.

> toH ! tugh qaSpu' noH..
> so ! soon the war came..

This time {noH} is correct. It's a specific war, this one, not just the 
idea of war.

{qaSpu'} isn't right, though. You're not completing the war in this 
sentence; you're saying it started. I'd say {tugh taghpu' noH} "soon the 
war started" or even {tugh ghobchoH} "soon they started to make war."

> qaStaHvIS jaj law', yavDaq pumtaH 'Iw.. qaStaHvIS jaj law' jul DoqchoHmoH 'Iw..
> for many days blood was falling on the ground.. for many days blood
> was making the sun become red..

pov mu'tlheghmeyvam!

> Hegh rIntaH yoHbogh vIghro' law' 'a tagha' Qappu' DIvI'chaj
> many brave cats died, however eventually their federation won.

Nice {rIntaH}!

> vaj Hoch targhmeyvo' qo' Say'choHmoH vIghro' DIvI'..
> thus, the federation of the cats cleansed the world from all the dogs..

{-vo'} isn't right here. Nothing is moving away from the targs. Qov gave 
a good alternative.

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