[Tlhingan-hol] Story: ghuv = The Recruit - 49

[Robyn Stewart]

It is my custom when I write stories, to transfer the degree of certainty in
V6s to the POV character in the scene.  I can't remember if anyone has
complained about it before.  I think it's a valid objection but I also think
it's a valid technique, less 'out there' than concrete poetry. I think it's
akin to describing a scene in the voice and experiences of a character, so
that when one POV character passes the field s/he sees "a horse" while
another sees "a three year old anglo-arab, chestnut with a white stocking on
the off hindleg." 

 

By your logic I could almost never use -Hey in a narrative, because when the
characters see what to them is a mangHey, I the author know it is a mangna'.
How would you feel in an English language story if the author wrote, "Torg
sees a bucket." and then later in the story it turns out to be a cat? I'm
telling you "Torg seems to hear a motor whining."  I know damn well whether
he hears a motor whining or not [he does] but I'm not going to give it away
yet.  It doesn't work for you that I as the author am saying I think he can
hear a motor.

 

It's noted, however that the technique didn't work for you.

 

As for vIng, I use it in both English senses and if forced to surrender one
I would surrender the "complains" meaning, not the "makes a high pitched
noise" meaning, because we have such a paucity of onomatopoeia.

 

But all together you would be content with 

 

'aplo'Daq chuSlaw' nguSDI' 'e' Qoy torgh.

 

Which I like better anyway. I probably started with nguSDI' Qoylaw' torgh
and then added the SAO.

 

I really appreciate you reading and commenting, and in no way want to shoot
you down. Please anyone else comment on whether my V6 use seems appropriate
to you.

 

From: De'vID [mailto:de.vid.jonpin at gmail.com] 
Sent: November 6, 2013 2:56 AM
To: tlhIngan-Hol
Cc: Robyn Stewart
Subject: Re: [Tlhingan-hol] Story: ghuv = The Recruit - 49

 


On 13 Oct 2013 18:13, "Robyn Stewart" <robyn at flyingstart.ca> wrote:
>  'aplo'Daq vIng nguSDI' 'e' Qoylaw' torgh. = "In the container a motor
> whines - Torg uncertainly hears that." i.e. "Torg thinks he might hear a
> motor whining in the container."

{-law'} expresses uncertainty on the part of the speaker, not the subject,
though.

Also I'm not sure {vIng} applies to {nguSDI'}.

-- 
De'vID

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