[Tlhingan-hol] nuq bop bom: 'ay' vaghmaH chorgh: <chaw'>

[Qov]

For this part, was going to try using the one sentence per line style 
ghunchu'wI' uses instead of the English paragraphing style I have 
been using, but it came out oddly when it was one line of dialogue 
with multiple sentences in it. I've used it for the beginning and 
then stopped. What do you think?

Mahoun has just arranged to meet 'eSSIm to pick up his Imperial 
Klingon Grain Purchasing Permit.
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chob'a'Daq QeDpIn legh Mahoun.
jatlh QeDpIn
"tIr vIqeltaH.
chovnatlh vIghajbe'mo' ngermey maw' vI'oghtaH.
chaq SuQbe' tIr 'a SopwI' choHlaH."

jatlh HoD, "chay' choH?"

jatlh QeDpIn
"HoSghajmoH?
SuvvIpmoH?
chaq tlhIngan boQqangmoH.
vISovbe'."[36]

Qub HoD.
chob'a' tlhoy'Daq loQ ro' mup.
jatlh
"DuHbe'!
muvuQ tlhInganvam.
  jIHojHa' 'e' vIchID 'a mungejta'be'."

jatlh QeDpIn
"naDev Soj DaSoppu'pa' DuvuQ.
Hoch DuH vIqel neH.
tlhInganvaD nuH mojlaH tIr."

jatlh HoD. "yuQDaq jIQol. Suy chaw' munob tlhIngan. chaq SoHvaD tIr 
De' vISuqlaH."

"tIrDaj chovnatlh DaSuqlaHchugh HInob." jatlh QeDpIn.

"luq," jatlh HoD jolpa' luSIchDI'. "HIjol." Quv nob.

jolpat ravDaq gho'taHvIS HoD jatlh "meHvaD yIjatlh qaStaHvIS wa' rep 
HISujQo'. 'a HungpIn yIja'Qo'."

"lu'," jatlh QeDpIn. "qatlh wep Daqem? ghorDaq tujqu'mo' 'utbe'bej."

jatlh HoD. "nob qat. yIrIH." wewchoH pa' 'ej wewbe'choHDI' yotlhmey 
moj. Mahoun qIp tuj. yu'egh rur. 'eSSIm qachDaq yIttaHvIS lutu' Sung 
puS. lubej 'a nISbe'. tugh 'eSSIm qach SIch. lojmIt qIpmeH ro' lo'. 
poSmoH 'eSSIm. Ha'DIbaH DIr chIS tuQtaH. Dat QeyHa' 'ej tlhopDaq bID 
poStaH. porghDaj Dun Ho' Mahoun. chIch much'eghbe'chugh vaj pImchu' 
tlhIngan be'pu' yelwIyyIt be'pu' je. qaSqa'law' cha'Hu. Quch 
yIQmoHta'be'chugh tuj, DaH yIQbej. yopwaH lISnISchoH. jatlh "'ey."

"'ey nuq?" jatlh 'eSSIm 'a yajba'.

"yel Hol mu' 'oH" jatlh Mahoun. "<DaH chaw' HInob> 'oS."

"chaw' qanob," jatlh 'eSSIm. "yI'el." qach 'elpu'DI' qoD bIr law' Hur bIr puS.

"qaq," jatlh Mahoun. "naDev bIrmo' jIbel."

"tuj cherghnISlaH SuvwI'," jatlh 'eSSIm. "pujmoHchugh vaj pujtaHvIS 
Suv 'e' ghojnIS."

'eb ghov Mahoun. jatlh "bIpujtaHvIS bISuv 'e' DatIv'a'?"

"'utbe' bel," jatlh 'eSSIm. "vISIQqang." De'wI'Hom lellI' 'eSSIm. 
raSDaq lan 'ej lIS. "naDev yISen," jatlh.

jIH SenmeH 'eSSIm retlhDaq Qam Mahoun. nIH SenwI' muchtaHvIS, HIch 
So'bogh wep qeQmoH poS ghop. Huv 'e' 'olpu'DI' wejlogh chu'wI' 'uy.
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SKI: Essim and Mahoun are each sleazy in their own ways, and for 
their own reasons.
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[36] Stranger things happen in real life. There's a parasite that 
only reproduces in cats. If it gets into another animal, it 
apparently changes their brain to make them like cats more, so that 
it can get back into a cat. Hence crazy cat ladies and rats that are 
attracted to cats. 
<http://www.nytimes.com/2007/12/09/magazine/09_10_catcoat.html>http://www.nytimes.com/2007/12/09/magazine/09_10_catcoat.html 
I find it a little bit annoying when real life is too unbelievable to 
use in a story.
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