<p>Some very difficult lines in this part. </p>
<p>(CARTWRIGHT: nuq wISutlh?)<br>
SPOCK: neHmaH HeH retlhDaq tengchaHmeymaj 'ejyo'waw'meymaj je DIlagh. tlhoS qaStaHvIS SochmaH DIS, maSuvchuqrupqu' tlhInganpu' maH je. Dor ghu'vam'e' luDIllaHbe'bogh tlhInganpu'.<br>
boQDu': *Bill*, 'ejyo' wIpujqu'moH 'e' wIchup'a'?<br>
C in C: malengbejtaH[1] 'ej maQulbejtaH, HoD, 'ach...<br>
CARTWRIGHT: jImorghnIS. DIvI' logh qoDDaq wunHa'choH tlhInganpu' 'e' wIchaw'chugh vaj maHoH'egh. qIbDaq nov veQ lumoj tlhInganpu'. 'ej 'ejyo' wIlaghchugh, yermaj DanDI' mut vaQ[2] maHub'eghlaHbe'. tormoHmeH 'eb 'oH 'ebvam'e'. ghIq mab wIqon 'e' wIpoQmeH HoSmaj QaQ law' HoSchaj QaQ puS.[3]<br>
KIRK: qaH!<br>
C in C: *qIrq* HoD?<br>
KIRK: not tlhInganpu' voqlaH vay'.[4] DoS'e' qIpbogh *Cartwright* 'aj vIqIp[5] 'e' raDlu'.[6] qechvam lajvIplu'.[7]</p>
<p>[1] - I'm surprised there's no word for "explore", considering "to explore strange new worlds" and all that.<br>
[2] - Can {vaQ} be applied to {mut}?<br>
[3] - "Then we'll be in a far better position..." Better than what? I don't know how to express a comparative in Klingon where the thing being compared to isn't specified. I've translated it as "we'll be in a better position than the Klingons", but I think Cartwright really means "we'll be in a better position than we are now". I'd written {ghIq HoSmaj QaQ law' DaH HoSmaj QaQ puS}, but can the adverbials {ghIq} and {DaH} be used in this way? <br>
[4] - Or should this be {reH tlhInganpu' voqlaH pagh}? Of course, what I really want is {-lu'} with {-laH}: {not tlhInganpu' *luvoqlaHlu'}.<br>
[5] - The expressions we have for "I agree with him" all put all the agreeing parties into the subject: {maQochbe' [ghaH jIH je]}, {wa' DoS wIqIp [ghaH jIH je]}. However, Kirk and Cartwright are not being forced to agree with each other; only Kirk is being forced to agree with Cartwright. {DoS'e' qIpbogh *Cartwright* 'aj vIqIp} "I hit the target hit by Admiral Cartwright" -- does this work as an obvious extension of {wa' DoS wIqIp} but with the emphasis put on Kirk's role?<br>
[6] - {vIqIp 'e' raDlu'} "I am compelled to hit (it)" I follow the example of {Damuv 'e' wIvlu'} "You are chosen to join (it)" here. Or would {vIqIp net raD} be less controversial?<br>
[7] - How to translate "terrifying"? It's culturally taboo for Klingons to express fear. Of course, a Federation officer is saying this line, so maybe he can get away with saying something a Klingon would never say. Or maybe I can use {ghIj} instead of {-vIp}: {qechvammo' ghIjqu'lu'}? I like {-vIp} because it's underused, compared to {ghIj}.</p>
<p>> CARTWRIGHT: Negotiations for what?<br>
> SPOCK: The dismantling of our space stations and starbases along the<br>
> Neutral Zone, an end to almost seventy years of unremitting hostility<br>
> with the Klingons, which the Klingons can no longer afford.<br>
> MILITARY AIDE: Bill, are we talking about mothballing the Starfleet?<br>
> C in C: I'm sure that our exploration and scientific programs would be<br>
> unaffected, Captain, but...<br>
> CARTWRIGHT: I must protest. To offer the Klingons a safe haven within<br>
> Federation space is suicide. Klingons would become the alien trash of<br>
> the galaxy. And if we dismantle the fleet, we'd be defenceless before<br>
> an aggressive species with a foothold on our territory. The<br>
> opportunity here is to bring them to their knees. Then we'll be in a<br>
> far better position to dictate terms.<br>
> KIRK: Sir!<br>
> C in C: Captain Kirk?<br>
> KIRK: The Klingons have never been trustworthy. I'm forced to agree<br>
> with Admiral Cartwright. This is a terrifying idea.</p>