[Tlhingan-hol] Klingon Word of the Day: ba'

[SuStel]

On 3/10/2016 2:46 PM, chransberry at gmail.com wrote:
> quSDaq ba'taHvIS Qub ghu, "'Iw rur Sutra'ber naH vIychorgh. jItInchoHDI'
> Hoch vIcharghta'!"
> Sitting in the chair, the baby thought, "Strawberry juice resembles
> blood. When I get big, I will conquer everything!"

I suggest removing the {-ta'} at the end. With it, it says "I will have 
conquered everything," as if it will be completed at the time you become 
big. Presumably, when you become big you will begin your campaign. But 
you're not really talking about BEGINNING the conquering; you're just 
saying that you WILL conquer. Thus, no {-ta'} (and no {-choH}).

Otherwise, this works for me. I suggest reordering the beginning thus: 
{quSDaq ba'taHvIS ghu Qub, ...} "while the baby was sitting on the chair 
it thought,..." I suggest this because once I've finished reading the 
clause {quSDaq ba'taHvIS} I still have no idea who's sitting. The way 
you wrote it isn't wrong, but I find it easier to parse each clause 
separately and know who all the players are when I finish each.

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