[Tlhingan-hol] Indie Movie translation

[Robyn Stewart]

>> Green light, green light.  Dweller on the threshold come reap my vengeance".

Mine:
wovwI' SuD, wovwI' SuD.
DIn DabwI', bortaSwIj DayobmeH HIghoS.

"Green light, green light. Dweller at the threshold, come to me in order to harvest my vengeance."

I presume that repeatedly addressing the green light is a requirement of the spell, thus necessary, regardless of her hurry. 

DIn is the open area just before a passage. I chose that over loOr because I'm not sure that a door is involved. So interpret the threshold as being the space between realms. 

jIHvaD bInoDmeH would be fine, if you're not attached to the agriculture metaphor. 

- Qov

> On Jul 22, 2015, at 7:46, Steven Boozer <sboozer at uchicago.edu> wrote:
> 
> Chelsea Knauf:
>> The context:"The scene as it happens is the climax of the film. The young
>> woman, Ivy, has just had her eye gouged out by a three hundred year old
>> warlock/mountain man. She breaks free screaming and retreats to a far side
>> of the room. It’s dark and she pulls out a green amulet. Then she utters
>> the spell you’re going to translate, the amulet glows green and fills the
>> room with green light. The Warlock is pulled between our dimension and
>> another. In that space between the two dimensions, a spirit attacks him
>> and Ivy has her revenge."
>> 
>> The phrase is "Green light, green light.  Dweller on the threshold come reap my vengeance".
>> My beginner attempt at translation: {wovwI' SuD, wovwI' SuD.  bortaSwIj yItIv lojmitDaq DabwI'}
> 
> My version:
> 
>  SuDwI', SuDwI'. lojmIt DabwI',  bortaSwIj yIHev (or: yIlaj)!
>  "Green thing, green thing.  Inhabiter of the door, receive
>   (or: accept) my vengeance!"
> 
> {wovwI' SuD, wovwI' SuD} is a bit wordy for a quickly chanted spell.  But if you like {wovwI'} "thing that is light/bright" another option is {wewwI'} "thing that glows".  Since the "amulet glows green and fills the room with green light" you could also go with {wovmoHwI'} "light (device)" which was used in the Bird of Prey Poster:  {telDaq wovmoHwI'mey} "Wing Lights".  Whichever one you choose, I would only say it once as Ivy is in a bit of a hurry.
> 
> "Dweller on the threshold" is not the subject of the sentence, but the person/being she is addressing.  Eg. "John, close the door!" not "John closes the door."  Also, when using {Dab} "reside in/at, dwell in/at" don't tag the place with {-Daq}: eg.
> 
>  Daqvam vIDab 
>  "I live at this place" (st.k 7/99)
> 
>  qachvetlh vIDab
>  "I live in/at that building" (st.k 7/99)
> 
>  Qo'noS vIDab 
>  "I live on Kronos" (st.k 7/99)
> 
> Thus {lojmIt DabwI'} "thing/person that dwells in/at the door/gateway".
> 
> In addition to the noun {bortaS} we have the verb {noD} "retaliate, seek revenge":
> 
>  batlh Heghlu'chugh noDnISbe' vay' 
>  An honorable death requires no vengeance. TKW
> 
>  cheQIHchugh manoDbe''a' 
>  Wrong us, shall we not seek revenge? TKW
> 
>  nurraj nIHlu'ta'mo' manoD 
>  We will avenge your stolen pride (PB draft?)
> 
>  le'yo'raj nIHlu'ta'mo' penoD jatlh qeylIS 
>  And Kahless spoke to them... about avenging their stolen pride PB
> 
> All the known examples do not take an object, so we could say:
> 
>  lojmIt DabwI', [SoHvaD] jInoD.
>  "Dweller in/at the door/gateway, I will be avenged [on you]."
> 
> I'm not sure about adding {SoHvaD}, but I'm sure others will share their opinions
> 
> 
> --
> Voragh
> Ca'Non Master of the Klingons
> 
> 
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